Proposal Paper Concerns

My main concern is whether or not my paper is organized in a way that makes sense.  I would like to know if it flows well.  I am wondering if I have included everything that I needed to.  I would also like to know if I have justified my answer well enough.  Is it long enough?  These are my main concerns about my paper.

In Class Writing 11-22

I. A policy at USC that needs to be changed is the meal plan system.  Russell House profits when we do not use our meal and when we do.  Depending on what we buy or how much we buy, our meal goes over the cost that the meal covers.  This means that we have to pay extra for our food.  Then, when we do not use a meal, we lose it because they do not roll over.  I think that leftover meals should be used to pay for meal when it runs over.  We already pay way too much money to go to this school and we should be able to get a full meal on our plan alone. 

Planning Essay 4

The problem is that world hunger has existed since the beginning of time and needs immediate attention.  Possible solutions include governmental organizations, individual organizations, biotechnology to achieve global security, and technological advances in farming.  I would like to propose that individual organizations will be the solution to the issue of world hunger.  I will need to do more research in support of this claim because I did not have many sources already in my annotated bibliography that were focused specifically on this topic. 

ICW 11-15

The difference between my paper from Thursday and my paper today is that I was able to extend some of my perspectives to lengthen it.  Also, I realized that I never defined my thesis statement so I made sure to include it in my paper.  The analysis of the sample essay was helpful in understanding the assignment, but not very helpful in actually writing it.  I was not able to open the file that contained my peer review comments.  The strongest element of my paper is probably the content because the sources I found were strong.  I'm concerned that my paper does not meet the length requirement.

SWA #24 Chicken in the Henhouse

Sedaris argues that Americans do not find homosexuality socially appropriate.  They feel that they can say whatever they want to on the subject, yet they are ill-informed and their words are still destructive.  The essay talks about his personal experience where he describes his thoughts and how he is constantly feeling judgement all around him, even when those people are unaware of his sexuality.  By the end of his personal account, he surprises the readers because he receives a compliment when both the audience and himself are expecting scrutiny.  He uses humor to reflect on Audrey's homophobic comments by pointing out that she is uninformed and inexperienced in the subject matter.  His sarcasm and wit about her comments helps the audience see the stereotypes and discrimination from a different perspective.  He is trying to show the audience that the majority of people that stereotype homosexuals are ignorant.  Even though their words are harmful, they are clueless and should not be given credit for their responses.

Annotated Bibliography on World Hunger

"Hunger Is Still a Problem Around the World" by Ismail Serageldin.  Nutrition.  David Haugen and Susan Musser, Eds.  Opposing Viewpoints Series.  Greenhaven Press, 2012.  Ismail Serageldin, "Abolishing Hunger,"  Issues in Science & Technology, vol. 25, no. 4, Summer 2009, pp. 35-38;  Fall 2009 by the University of Texas at Dallas, Richardson, TX.  Reprinted with permission.

This article would interest anyone who wants to help change the food system in the world.  The audience could be anyone.  The article offered many instructions to take in order to fix the current problems.  An increase in food production, which would lead to an increase in technology, new biofuels, more research, and new developments of water use, would all contribute to fixing the problems.  The author is pointing out the things that are wrong with the system and offering many different solutions.  The article didn't alter my viewpoint, but I definitely agree with the claims.  The hunger issue should be addressed and the author's suggestions would be beneficial towards the solution.

Searchinger, Timothy.  "A Quick Fix to the Food Crisis."  Scientific American 305.1 (2011): 14. Psychology and Behavioral Sciences Collection.  EBSCO.  Web 26 Oct. 2011

This article matches its title.  The audience would be anyone interested in fixing the food industry.  This one offers some useful statistics.  The main idea is that biofuels are in too much demand and that they are taking away from our ability to feed the hungry.  I agree with the author's claims and I think that this issue should be addressed.

Sanchez, Pedro A., and M. S. Swaminathan. "Cutting World Hunger in Half." Sciencemag.org. Science Magazine, 21 Jan. 2005. Web. 02 Nov. 2011. <http://www.sciencemag.org/content/307/5708/357.full>.

This source is objective.  This article would interest anyone curious about world hunger and a possible solution.  This article is based on statistics about The Millennium Project, a United Nations task to help reduce the number of hungry people in the world.  The "hot spots of world hunger" are mostly around Africa and India.  The article identifies three ways to cut hunger in half by means of global political action, national policy reforms, and community action in hunger hot spots.  I learned many statistics that have possibly grown in the past 6 years since it was written.  I agree because the authors said that reducing world hunger would depend on the governments of these nations.  If those governments have little corruption and are cooperative with the people, then progress will be achieved.  This will be useful in my project because of the information and the suggestions that the article has provided. 

Borlaug, Norman E. "Ending World Hunger. The Promise of Biotechnology and the Threat of Antiscience Zealotry." Plant Physiology. American Society of Plant Physiologists, Oct. 2000. Web. 02 Nov. 2011. <http://www.plantphysiol.org/content/124/2/487.full>.

Biotechnology can help end world hunger.  By designing plants differently, they can develop plants faster and therefore have more crops to offer.  The author claims that technology today has the ability to feed 10 billion people but that many would need to adopt the methods in order for it to have an impact.  Breakthroughs involving the genetic engineering of plants could lead to solving the problem.    

Anderson, Kerby. "World Hunger." Leadership University. Probe Ministries, 5 Aug. 2003. Web. 07 Nov. 2011. <http://www.leaderu.com/orgs/probe/docs/hunger.html>.

            The main causes of hunger are poverty, population, and priorities.  The people that live in poverty are the ones that are hungry and vice versa.  The population is growing dramatically and impacting the amount of hungry people around the world.  Anderson says, “Governmental control makes hunger worse.”  This article makes many references to books in the Bible in response to hunger but then says that there are many “unbiblical solutions.”  Interesting solutions and ideas were expressed in this article including “The Lifeboat Ethic” and “The Christian Ethic”, both of which could be useful. 

Minch, Dr. Kevin J. "Bilateral vs Multilateral Aid: Debatabase - Debate Topics and Debate Motions." IDEA: International Debate Education Association - Debate Resources & Debate Tools. 12 Sept. 2005. Web. 07 Nov. 2011. <http://www.idebate.org/debatabase/topic_details.php?topicID=392>.

This article provides the difference between bilateral and multilateral aid as well as the pros and cons of each.  Bilateral aid is money given through individual organizations while multilateral aid is money routed through large governmental agencies such as the United Nations. The listed pros and cons are new information to me and they would be very helpful when debating this subject in regards to world hunger.

Rosner, Hilary. "The Future of Farming: Eight Solutions For a Hungry World | Popular Science." Popular Science | New Technology, Science News, The Future Now. 7 Aug. 2009. Web. 07 Nov. 2011. <http://www.popsci.com/environment/article/2009-07/8-farming-solution-help-stop-world-hunger>.

A possible solution to world hunger is a second green revolution.  Eight changes to a solution are expressed in this article.  This includes farming the desert, reducing resources, rebuilding rice, replacing fertilizer, remapping the land, robot labor, revitalizing the soil, and making supercrops.  I learned about all of these different farming techniques that could help improve the system and lead the way towards a cure to world hunger.

Shah, Anup. "Solving World Hunger Means Solving World Poverty — Global Issues." Global Issues : Social, Political, Economic and Environmental Issues That Affect Us All — Global Issues. 24 Oct. 2010. Web. 07 Nov. 2011. <http://www.globalissues.org/article/8/solving-world-hunger-means-solving-world-poverty>.

This article seems to believe that production is not a solution to world hunger, but rather solving the issue of poverty goes hand-in-hand with hunger.  The author claims “poverty is largely a political issue.”  The argument is that there is not a lack of food, but a lack of money to purchase food and an unfair distribution of food.  This provides a different opinion towards the subject that does not involve production.

SWA #23

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a. My issue is world hunger and that many steps need to be taken in order to work on a solution.  Every 3.6 seconds someone dies of hunger so the public needs to stop being selfish and approach this issue with everything that they've got.  Technological advances and monetary support will lead to a solution especially if majorities of people are willing to offer their support.

b. The groups interested in this issue include those suffering from hunger, scientists, farmers, and everyday people who want to make an impact on the world.  Those suffering will support anyone trying to help them out.  The scientists are interested in helping out through biotechnology.  Farmers may be concerned about new technology and they may not be willing to change their ways if money is an issue in using the technology.  Everyday people will express sympathy towards the subject and try to help out by donating actual food or money through organizations, making themselves aware of what is going on with the subject, and by voting for the people that will work towards fixing the problem.  Poverty is one of the leading causes of hunger, so any medical professionals would be concerned about the hungry because malnutrition threatens their health.

c. Many are in support of helping reduce hunger but a "majority prefers to give aid through multilateral institutions rather than bilaterally."  Average Americans would want to help out, but they would not be too willing to pay the costs.  Many believe that money for world hunger should be given through private organizations as opposed to government programs.

d.  I agree that money towards world hunger should be given out through private organizations over the government.  I think that many programs out there would succeed at accomplishing aid over a government regulated program.

SWA #22

Sanchez, Pedro A., and M. S. Swaminathan. "Cutting World Hunger in Half." Sciencemag.org. Science Magazine, 21 Jan. 2005. Web. 02 Nov. 2011. <http://www.sciencemag.org/content/307/5708/357.full>.


This source is objective.  This article would interest anyone curious about world hunger and a possible solution.  This article is based on statistics about The Millennium Project, a United Nations task to help reduce the number of hungry people in the world.  The "hot spots of world hunger" are mostly around Africa and India.  The article identifies three ways to cut hunger in half by means of global political action, national policy reforms, and community action in hunger hot spots.  I learned many statistics that have possibly grown in the past 6 years since it was written.  I agreed with the authors because they said that reducing world hunger will depend on the governments of these nations.  If those governments have little corruption and are cooperative with the people, then progress will be achieved.  This will be useful in my project because of the information and the suggestions that the article has provided. 


Borlaug, Norman E. "Ending World Hunger. The Promise of Biotechnology and the Threat of Antiscience Zealotry." Plant Physiology. American Society of Plant Physiologists, Oct. 2000. Web. 02 Nov. 2011. <http://www.plantphysiol.org/content/124/2/487.full>.


Biotechnology can help end world hunger.  By designing plants differently, they can develop plants faster and therefore have more crops to offer.  The author claims that technology today has the ability to feed 10 billion people but that many would need to adopt the methods in order for it to have an impact.  Breakthroughs involving the genetic engineering of plants could lead to solving the problem.    

ICW 11-1 The Problem

The problem is that biofuels are using up too many of our food resources that could be better used by feeding the hungry around the world.  It is important that we change our dependency on ethanol soon so that we can do something to help the people out.  The people affected by this change would be a large number.  People might disagree if they think that this change in fuel affects them in any way.

SWA #21

1.  The argument is that people don't take the time to read things, they just expect to understand the whole situation from a title or picture.  Society thinks that the Internet has the solution to every question and this suggests that the details are not important.  People think that reading a whole article will be a waste of time because they could simply look up a modified version of what had happened on the web.  Also they think that pictures and titles suggest more important information and tend to disregard the actual text.  Society expects information to be handed to them with no effort on their part whatsoever and they just care about the main outcome, not the whole story.

2.  The author uses hyperbole throughout the whole article when describing the "large block of uninterrupted text" and society's reactions to it.  This technique helps the author advance the argument because it exaggerates his point perfectly.  It is also ironic because the article itself was basically interrupted text.  This article was confusing at first to understand, but once you read the whole article it all came together and you could interpret the meaning behind it, proving his point.  Society should take the time to receive all of the facts and interpret the meaning for themselves instead of waiting on the media to tell them of the problem and then offer them their idea of the solution/reaction; clearly details matter.